She knew he’d be waiting for her, like she’d always known, everyday for the past three months. She’d felt his eyes on her, the very first time he’d noticed her walking down the narrow street, on her way back home from college. He’d been there every day since that day, morning and evening, just to look at her. No words were ever exchanged. The tinkling of the tiny bells on her delicate, filigreed anklets and the jingling of the glass bangles on her wrist were the only sounds that surrounded them. She knew, of course, with a feminine instinct, that he was enraptured by her. Perhaps, he even believed that he was in love with her. She thought of him as she dressed that morning, as she looked into mirror, as she applied kohl to enhance her doe eyes, as she stuck a tiny bindi on her forehead and wove the jasmine garland into her hair. Would he notice that she’d changed her hairdo, she wondered? She debated over wearing the peach saree or the blue. Which one would he find more alluring? She loved the blue saree, but the peach one complimented her flawless golden complexion. Yes, peach would be the one he’d like. Yet she’d never,ever looked at him directly. Always, always, through lowered, demure eyelashes, through the corner of her eyes. A last look in mirror. She liked what she saw. Oh! she knew she looked good today.
Apparently he thought so too. Perhaps that was what prompted him to drawl out “Hello beautiful….” after months of silent wooing. Oh no! She’d hoped he wouldn’t say anything, even though the wolf whistle had warned her. She had begun to enjoy, even revel in their silent affair. She couldn’t, she wouldn’t look at him now. That would be a job for her father’s goons, following her at a safe distance. She’d just walk on pretending to be mortally offended. Or her father, equally famous for his volatile temper as well as for his underworld empire, would end her college-going and force her to stay home, secluded, all alone. She wondered idly though, which part of his handsome body would they break? Hands? Legs? Had they ever actually killed someone that they’d felt had dared to offend her? How many of her former would-be beaus were scattered across the city, maimed or worse?
This week’s words – demure, offend, volatile.







28 scribbled back:
WOW... Femme Fatale indeed. Question is - should I submit? ;) Nice write. Love and Light, Sender
I enjoyed your story and could almost see how beautiful she looked! I loved your description. :-)
Wooooowww! Beautiful writing, Dreamer, with an excellent plot and twist. Wonderful!
Oh that was wonderful! Love how the spell was broken by his carelessness. Poor lad! Hope he's not too badly hurt.
She doesn't seem all the concerned about the man, huh? Just a day in her life.
Hi Dreamer,
My 1st visit here:).The silent affair had a charm of her own.
I believe the opening lines of the shy boy could have been a bit more realistic(considering he was so shy.)
Hope to see more of you:)
~Harsha
Oh, my! She's like a black widow, this one, only she doesn't need to bite.
I thought it was going to go sweetly, blossoming romance and all that. I was wrong --
And I'm glad. I much prefer your version. :)
Yikes, a cruel character to be sure. Liked the detail.
Hi Susannah, She had to be beautiful to ensnare so many. Thanks for your kind words!
EEK! She's ornery, that's for sure. And amazing detail!
Ohh... looks like word hadn't gotten around as yet how dangerous it is to woo the don's daughter! Lol. A good one Dreamer! Let me try and come up with something too.
BTW. the 'volatile temper' and the ' underworld empire' rhyme :)
THat was shocking, her thinking of cruelty without a thought..black humour.
What an interesting and revealing story. The delicate appearance of the woman is beautifully contrasted with the violence of the men around her..great stuff..Thanks for your visit..Jae
Aww Deeps! That is so sweet of you to say so!
Thank you, Caterpillar :)
Sorry to have shocked you :). Hope you liked it though!
I know, Shail! Don't these guys read newspapers or what? :D. Thanks for pointing out the rhyme. Ha! Guess I am a poet and I don't even know it ;)
Glad you liked it!
Thank you!
And this is when she doesn't intend to bite :) She's just looking out for herself! Glad you liked it :)
Thank you for dropping in :) My idea of him was not as a shy guy, but more as a man enraptured by her. The first time her beauty overwhelms him into make a clumsy approach, is unfortunately the last time too.
Her concern for her own freedom, albeit limited is her primary concern.
The odds are he'd have just been roughed up a little bit ;)
You really say the nicest things, Pallu :)
Thank you, Sender :)
Loved this story...so very well written, Dreamer! Its a treat to read your stories, really! Keep them coming!
Wonderful disciption!
The story is awesome,i am not blinked my eyes while reading this story..
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