He stopped in his tracks, looking aghast at the blood flowing out from her limp wrist.
“Oh my God! My poor darling! So much blood!” he cried in horror and fainted.
As she bandaged her wrist and grabbed a wet towel to revive him, she muttered “I told you we needed a new can opener”.
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This is my first attempt at what is called 55 Fiction (microfiction that is limited to 55 words). I did not even know this kind of fiction existed a year ago
. I don’t know if this qualifies as 55 Fiction, but had to try though.
22 scribbled back:
You must know that it is naive
to think that all men are brave
they can't stand to see blood save
when they cut themself while they shave.
Purrrrfect 55-er! And hilarious to boot. Yeah, I can well imagine this happening. The DH cannot bear to watch someone being given an injection! :P
I also tried my hand in 55 er for the first time yesterday itself...
So both of us are sailing in the same boat....As I don't qualify myself to comment on this genre of writing I can just say it was a hilarious read....
Hilarious.. very nice post!! I am new to this genre too.. but this was a very good attempt I must say :D
@Govind, Nice poem! :D
Yup I can understand, Shail, the hubby sort of "inspired" this one :)
Hi Geeta, will pop right over and check out your 55-er. It is harder than it looks ain't it?
Thank you, West Wind :D.
haha... that was really funny...
nice ....short and sweet :)
Ah yes, the brave and chivalrous protector.....
Hilarious!
Cheers,
Quirky Indian
A perfect 55 er(I think this one follows all the rules ) very good first attempt .. so now you know the craft of 55-ers ...will expect to see more :)
Thanks a bunch, Swapna1
Thank you, Anish.
QI, the perils of being "The complete man", one presumes :).
Thanks, Dhiman. It is kind of a fun challenge to follow the rules and keep it to 55 words.
That was a fantastic attempt at 55 fiction. It being your first attempt at it all I can say is, I can't read more of the same from you :)
Keep up the good work.
Cheers!!
packed suspense in 55 words!..good one !
@Chatterbox and Renu, Thanks a lot. I think I might just take an occasional crack at the 55-er :D.
LOL! missed this one...
How well have brought out the truth in 55 words!
ha ha ha...hilarious! cracker of a 55-er :)
Thanks Kitten and Deeps :D
Ha ha ha, good one , good one. Men cannot stand a common cold.. forget about blood. No wonder, that women bear the babies!!
A Good 55-er, Dreamer. A teeny tiny tip.. I think you can leave the 'Can opener' line till the very end, you know, to increase the PUNCH it lends :-)
LOL :) Ha ha :) Great 55er!! She made a great knight in shining armour :)
Thanks Pallu. Great tip!
Thank you IHM :D.
Ha ha ha
too good. I am loving it. Keep them coming, girl!
hey... nice looking background! where r u? ur kids keeping u busy?
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